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I love to argue,
I love to start a fight.
Verbally
Physically
'Cause when they insult me,
I'm feeling alive,
When they hurt me,
I'm free.
Lovely pain …
Nothing is more beautiful
Than seeing
That my unimportant soul,
This puny flame,
Has the power to really start
A raging fire.
I love to start a fight.
Verbally
Physically
'Cause when they insult me,
I'm feeling alive,
When they hurt me,
I'm free.
Lovely pain …
Nothing is more beautiful
Than seeing
That my unimportant soul,
This puny flame,
Has the power to really start
A raging fire.
For ^Exillior's new 50 words Contest "Flames".
Finally muse kissed me
And I think that's the first time that I write a poem I can't identify myself with ever. O.o
Additional last line: Mysterious as the dark side of the moooooon
Copyright by =carpenoctem410
Finally muse kissed me
And I think that's the first time that I write a poem I can't identify myself with ever. O.o
Additional last line: Mysterious as the dark side of the moooooon
Copyright by =carpenoctem410
© 2010 - 2024 carpenoctem410
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Hmm...
I like the structure and how you've set it out. The straight-forwardness conveys the person's feelings and thoughts well, I think.
I'm not sure about the full stop after the 'fight'. Part of me feels that a colon would be better, but... eh, I like how the full stop makes it more ... violent, abrupt, potent?
I love the phrasing, especially in the middle. The last stanza is quite intriguing, as well, in the sense of its choppiness and how it emphasises the rage of the fire, perhaps...and how it's continuous, in a sense.
Brief, but poignant. I wish you the best of luck with the contest.
I like the structure and how you've set it out. The straight-forwardness conveys the person's feelings and thoughts well, I think.
I'm not sure about the full stop after the 'fight'. Part of me feels that a colon would be better, but... eh, I like how the full stop makes it more ... violent, abrupt, potent?
I love the phrasing, especially in the middle. The last stanza is quite intriguing, as well, in the sense of its choppiness and how it emphasises the rage of the fire, perhaps...and how it's continuous, in a sense.
Brief, but poignant. I wish you the best of luck with the contest.